Asian Redneck


This is a 100-word challenge from Friday Fictioneers. Have fun, and let me know what you think. Photo by Douglas M. MacIlroy

Bubba didn’t care what others thought about his fish.

“They’re just carp,” Tommy-boy said, flinging a flat rock across the surface of the pond. It skipped three times, then sank below the surface. “What you need is catfish.”

“Koi,” Bubba replied. “And don’t throw rocks at my fish.”

“Coy?” Tommy-boy picked up another stone. “You gave your fish Sally’s last name?” Aiming at the tree opposite the pond, Tommy-boy let the rock fly. “She ain’t going to like that.”

Bubba sighed and gazed at the koi swirling in the pond below. Being Japanese in Alabama wasn’t going to be easy.


34 responses to “Asian Redneck

  1. I like this. Very cleaver. Cute ending.

  2. I laughed because it reminded me of when I lived in Texas, or anywhere in the south. It really could have happened. Good dialog. Oh and Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! It’s a great place full of terrific people, you should fit right in.

  3. This is great. Love the humor and realness of it. Well done!

  4. Hi Cherry. I enjoyed your crisp clear writing and wry humour very much. Great story. Karen

    • Thank you, Karen. That comment has given me a glow that I’ll carry around for the rest of the day. Thanks for reading!

  5. it’s interesting to note how spoken word can be interpreted differently depending on one’s upbringing.

    • The variability of words and understanding are very interesting, and one the reasons that I write poetry. I love all those shades. Thanks for coming by for a read!

  6. Seems like Alabama’s an interesting place. Thanks for your comment.

    • Like any other place, Alabama has it’s good and bad. Sometimes I dwell too much on the latter. Thanks for coming by for a read and leaving a comment. 🙂

  7. Dear Cherry,
    It’s always makes for an interesting story when different cultures collide. I’m surprised Tommy-boy didn’t go noodlin’ for koi. 🙂

    • I haven’t heard that term in a while … at least since my brother last dived for cats. Thanks for the read and the reminder! 🙂

  8. yes I think the koi may not fit in in Alabama

  9. Great interpretation of the photo prompt–very original, very funny!

    • Thanks, Jan. This is my first try, and I had fun giving the 100-word format a go. Thanks for reading and commenting. 🙂

  10. I took it that Bubba wasn’t actually Japanese but was trying to adopt the culture. Nicely pitched story.

    • Even I haven’t figured that one out, Mike. Bubba is the child’s form of “brother,” so someone from another country could pick up that title. And, as you’ve said, it could also be a Southern boy trying to adopt the culture. I’m still not sure, and would probably have to develop it further to sort this one out. Thanks for the read and the comment!

  11. Being Japanese in Alabama — dear god, that’s a whole series of stories! Nice job.

    • You’re right, Ken. As I said earlier: there’s only three types of folks in rural Alabama – black, white and Baptist. And it could be a long series of books. 🙂

  12. A very cool take on the prompt. You have well captured the cultural differences and how it can affect a person. Well crafted. 🙂

  13. A really original take on the prompt, well done and welcome. You might not get so many reads this week as the major uploading/action takes place between Wednesday and Friday. Hope you’ll be back next week – enjoyed your submission.

    • Thank you, Sandra. I appreciate your insight and comment! I’ve a lot of reading to do between now and Wednesday. There are so many stories in this Linky, and I want to read them all before it’s too late.

      Have a good week.

  14. This is wonderful Cherry…I’m from the Mid-West but I can say that there are ignorant people in every place on the face if the Earth…

  15. Dear Cherry,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. It’s only fair to warn you that this is a highly addictive activity. Like Hotel California, you may check out any time but you can never leave.

    As for your story. I’d think it would be hard to be anything but white in Alabama. Well done story, Bubba-san.



    • Namaste, Rochelle. I thank you for running such an interesting challenge! Beautifully done, and I believe I’ll settle into this hotel.

      Thanks for reading my story. I lived in Alabama for many years. There were three kinds of folks there: black, white and Baptist. It’s an interesting chapter in my life, and I find I revisit time and again for story bits.

      Thanks for reading!

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